Showing posts with label Modifiers. Show all posts
Showing posts with label Modifiers. Show all posts

Tuesday, December 13, 2011

How to use Active Voice Effectively (i.e. "Show, Don't Tell")

Now that we've determined it's almost always better to pass on passive voice, let's talk about how to grab your reader with active voice.

Here's the key:
1) Active voice centers around verbs.

2) Choose verbs that paint a picture, so that you don't HAVE to paint a picture with added words before or after the verb. Remember, verbs were meant to do the heavy lifting, modifiers/descriptors were not.

3) Voila! You have crafted a "showing" sentence. Anyone else ever have trouble understanding "show vs. tell"? I had a long journey to that point. It all boils down to this:

Don't TELL that Johnny was bored:
Johnny was so bored that he fell asleep. <---- Verb= "was." Not very action-packed. Can't tell much from it.

SHOW that Johnny was bored:
Johnny's mind wandered. His head nodded until he finally dropped it to the desk in slumber. <--Verbs= wandered, nodded, dropped. Actions that show boredom without even having to say the word "boredom."


See that?
He read the book.
He devoured the book.
He trudged through the book.

Same (or nearly the same) number of words, but by just swapping out one or two bland verbs for more precise verbs, the entire meaning changes. A picture is painted. You...have...SHOWN!

What was your journey towards undersanding "showing vs. telling" in your writing? Share your insight, by all means!

Saturday, December 10, 2011

The Spice of Writing...

My Grandma used to tell me that spices could make or break a dish. True! But don't be fooled-- over-spicing can be just as fatal as under-spicing.

Same with writing...

Lesson: "More isn't always better... sometimes it's just more." (Character of Sabrina Fairchild). 

How do you hone your writing to find the "just right" amount of descriptors?

Wednesday, December 7, 2011

Modifiers weren't built for heavy lifting. Period.


After I proudly showed my husband this masterpiece I concocted today, he drew me a picture of a truly strong verb...

Lesson: strong verbs don't need a crew of munchkin adverbs to carry them. Maybe just a spotter- adverb every now and then...

Consider:
The very young, quite small boy ran rather speedily.
vs.
The youngin' bolted.

The youngin' wins!

CHECK OUT: Elements of Style (Strunk & White) Chapter V, section 4 (p. 71) for a short explanation whose eloquence rivals this plucky illustration by quirkygrammar.blogspot.com.

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